Thesis 1:Some people would like to think that making these videos is not a “real job” but there actually are many reasons for why they should be considered professionally.
Thesis 2: Some viewers on YouTube still believe that the users should not be significantly paid for uploading videos although the amount of work that must be done by popular users is very much equal to the work done by any average working individual.
Tim, thank you for posting your thesis. It is coming along.
ReplyDeleteIn what way can you remove vague language (some, many reasons, they) to strengthen your thesis?
In sentence number 2, where have you written what *should* be done? Adding the *should* statement to your thesis statement adds meat and clarity.